Write a story including the glass bottles.
You must included in your story:
- people (you and Oceane)
- a place
- a problem
- a panic
- a peaceful ending
Ideas:
- Do the bottles take you somewhere?
- Do the bottles make something happen in the ocean?
- Do the bottles make something happen to the creatures in the ocean?
- Do you have to sort out whatever has happened because you touched them?
Choice words:
When If After While
Despite Although Whenever? !
The explore
ReplyDeleteOne day there lived a girl called Oceane, who had blonde wavy hair and me, Milla, who has blonde hair as well. Oceane was really happy and I was really scared about going on the sea away from home. “There might be sharks in the sea and different fish there might be Great white sharks and maybe hammer heads! They might come to the boat and not be friendly.” I was scuba diving in the Arctic Ocean and it was really freezing and really icy.It was a really nice place but cold. When we got on the boat we set off in the sea going really far. when we got further out there was a great white and some hammer heads came to the boat like I imagined. I fell off of the boat with all the sharks around me. I felt really scared. when I was in the water. I found a bottle in the water floating away. I ran to get the bottle and it said to me count to three and then something will happen so we counted to three and BANG! BANG! BANG! I was back at the beach sat down on the sand with the bottle shinning in my eyes hurting them so hard. I couldn’t look at it at all because it was so bright. Oceane was amazed how I got out of the water all by myself. I was really proud of myself that I had done all that. Oceane was a bit scared when the sharks came to the boat. While I was in the water Oceane was eating biscuits on the boat. while I was in the water panicking. Oceane said “shall we do that again?”
“If I do that again I will be scared!”
Wow what a great story. Is oceane a real girl or boy name?
Delete{by leon moorside primary school}
Dear Milla ,
DeleteYour story was great. I like the part when you were talking about the stuff in the ocean. Did you actually go scuba diving.
Bye,
Tryston
Wow! What a grate story!
Deleteby sophie 4jp moorside
100 word challenge
ReplyDeleteIt was a stormy night and a boat had crashed and there was bottles floating on the water. but then I touched them and the storm stopped but oceane told me not to. We were on the boat and oceane said we need to go explore the ship what wrecked yesterday. Are!!!! I’m trapped help I saw a a a GREAT WHITE SHARK!!!! I forgot I have a laser gun in my suit pocket pow! The sharks are finally gone let’s get back to the boat before some more great white sharks come back. come on I think I see some more sharks coming.
Don’t touch the bottle
ReplyDeleteWhen we got to the North Sea I started to put on my swim suit on and soon I was in the depths of ocean exploring everything in sight. Then I saw a shipwreck I went to investigate. While I was swimming trying to find something to show the crew I saw a lady at the bottom it was medusa so quickly I picked up some random things and swam as quickly as I could. When I got to the start of the shipwreck I couldn’t see the bottom of the boat all of a sudden in the corner of my eye I saw the boat so I swam as fast as I could too it. After a tiring swim I climbed on to the boat , Oceane said “ what have you found it looks like the accent bottles of the well-known boat the Titanic”.
Paige,
DeleteI liked your story a lot epically that you swan down and found bottles. That we're from the Titanic. How did you figure out that the shipwreck was the Titanic. Did it say Titanic on the side of the ship? Did you see any other things besides the bottles? I enjoyed reading your story.
Bye,
Drew
thank you for the comment and yes it did have Titanic on the side of it.
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ReplyDeleteIt was a stormy night and a boat had crashed and there was bottles floating on the water. but then I touched them and the storm stopped but oceane told me not to. We were on the boat and oceane said we need to go explore the ship what wrecked yesterday. Are!!!! I’m trapped help I saw a a a GREAT WHITE SHARK!!!! I forgot I have a laser gun in my suit pocket pow! The sharks are finally gone let’s get back to the boat before some more great white sharks come back. come on I think I see some more sharks coming.
The mysterious bottles
ReplyDeleteOne beautiful day, me and oceane went for a dive in the Pacific Ocean. We saw coral, fish what was loads of shapes and sizes the coolest was the great white it was storking it’s pray and it pray was a nice and calm dolphin.
But then we saw a dangerous ship wreak I had to have a sneaky peaky it was a fantastic ship wreak we saw gold it was stunning site. But then we saw these mysterious bottles I went to have a look. But Oceane said “don’t touch the bottles there magical.”
But nothing happened then we went to suffice, my captain said the same thing happened to him when he was his age. I said “what happens to you when you touch the bottles?” He said to me” well after an hour you start to turn into you favrioute see creature” so I said “so I’ll turn into a great white” and then that was the end of being human bye world and hello salty water… When I turned into a great white shark but the next day I turned to a human I was astonished then I went to the dive labotory and said “I’m back my fello friends.
Man VS bottle!!
ReplyDeleteOne day oceane and Timmy were diving in the hot seas when they came across three bottles one looked like a potion the next was like a coke bottle the final one was curvy like a clam. Timmy went to touch it but oceane yelled “No you will split the universe!” But it was too late Timmy was worried now just then POP!! HE turned around and the potion bottle an eye then POP!!! Another one appeared then two legs came out of it he turned in fear as it said, “Hi I am popper have you met my friends?” Timmy shook and gulped “Err no.” He turned to see two more bottles he was amazed by them! One said “I am swirly.” Then the other said “Hi I am cola.” As oceane explored not knowing about the bottles Timmy was getting to know them. After a while it was time to return to the surface Timmy said to the bottles “Do you want to come to the dive in café with me?” Popper said “I will if you don’t tell anyone about us.” Timmy agreed and so they swam to the dive in café Timmy secretly gave the bottles some food and drinks. It was going well until it was time to go home he made the bottles a bed and put them to sleep in the morning he gave them some coco pops popper had a joke about that of course. About an hour later it was time to dive the bottles stayed on the beach so that they didn’t smash at the end they all watched TV.
Dear Joshua,
DeleteI liked your story, It was nice. How did the bottles come Alive? Why is this story called man vs bottle?
Sincerely,
Max
Dear Joshua,
DeleteI liked your story, it was nice. How did the bottles come alive? Why is the story called Man vs. bottle?
Max
Once upon a shipwreck a boy was wearing a orange wetsuit and he was called matt. When he got to the boat for diving, he met a girl wearing a black wetsuit called ocean. Do you think they would want to dive? They diced to go to the titanic because they were doing shipwrecks in school. While they were going to the titanic they saw a sharp toothed great white shark! After they saw that they saw potions. The shark started to go for them and they started to swim. They picked up the potions and swam to another boat this time it went to the surface.
ReplyDeleteDear Mat,
DeleteI liked your story because it had lots about ships. Are you interested in boats? I am because its cool to learn about stuff from a long time ago.
Bye,
Tryston
The Rise Of The Dutchman
ReplyDeleteIn the middle of the Caribbean sea me and Oceane had found the wreck of the Black pearl, I touched a bottle which contained a toy ship, “ wait
That’s no toy!” I shouted. We ran for our lives, we barely escaped as the Black pearl was demolished (again) replaced by the Flying Dutchman! It was time for Jack Sparrow to return. “We have to stop them” he said “We know that’s, why you’re here” said an astonished general of war. The battle lasted four days and four nights
wen for a dive in the ocean an w+ it and there was 6 glass bottles when I reach out bottles .Wen a great white shark cam and my ocean ran away to the boat and after a one hour we went back in the water and we went to feed the fish until we ran out of ear so we went back up to the boat and we got some ear and went to Cary on with our dive wen the moon jelly fish cam towards my if the moon jelly fish cam to give my and ocean. some electric but auk the sapper and spat it and put it in the brook fish in the boat and went to the hammer head shark to sap it and scar it away in the ocean to the rest of the shark so the hammer head shark went to. The other sharks and went to feed the GILER WILER AND sore an assume fish and a big wail cam and eat I and then they sore un other assume fish agent and took a photo it and went back to the boat.went in the boat for the glass
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Dear Alessandro,
DeleteI liked your story I also liked all the sharks. What kind of fish were you feeding were they were they baby sharks. Or we're they little fish that don't bite? How many fish were there?
Bye,
Drew
100 word challenge
ReplyDeleteIt was a stormy night deep at sea when Oceania arrived with bottles in her gloves “don’t touch these bottles” her warning was to late I was a fish a helpless little fish “NOOOOO!” cried Oceania she scooped me up and put me in a fish bowl and started to weep “why was I so selfish what have I done. If I didn’t bring those bottles home you wouldn’t be in this state” Oceania went diving and took the bottles back to the ship and found a dead body “oh no its my best friend Mandy and oh why it’s you” I swam towards my own dead body I could talk in fish language but what use is that to a human I swam away knowing what had happened to Mandy I looked high I looked low and I found a poor trapped fish it was Mandy I helped Mandy escape and took her to Oceania she was so happy to see us “how do I break the curse let’s take you both back to the lighthouse and put you in a fishbowl as soon as she poured the water the water out of the bottles and KABOOM they were humans again “MANDY YOUR BACK” “I found your friend” I mumbled to myself I went back to the ship wreck and took the bottles far far far away…
100 word challenge
ReplyDeleteIt was a sunny day we went into are bout. We sated of into the sea we were going scuba diving in the sea.
Soon we had got there we was in the middle of the pacific ocean we stopped the bout and put on are
Swimming suits on and then we went in to the sea we swam down in the sea I saw louds of defend kind of fish it was cool.
We saw a ship wreck we went in said the ship there was a pot in the ship it was spooky.
Then we swam a different way then we went somewhere and JUST THEN!!! Then there was louds of great white shark in a circle covering us in the middle the sea then we got are lazar guns out an started to zap the they got angry and started to Chas us in the sea we lepton going as fast as we could go we were pan acing in was very scary. The great white sharks were massive and cinemas and very scary.
We cap on going we kept on zapping them they got a little bit angry more we swam as fast as we could go so we had lost them an went all the way back to the bout but a different
Way not the shark way it took so long we yearly fell asleep soon we had got to the ship an fell a sleep
In the ship and had something to eat it was cool but not when the sharks we there we had to zap them.
I like the way you split all the parts of the story into paragraphs!
Delete{leon Moorside primary school}
Dear Muhhammad,
DeleteI liked your story, it was cool. Where did you get the ray guns? Where are the bottles in this story?
Sincerely,,
Max
Don’t touch the bottles “DON’T TOUCH THE BOTTLES THEY ARE SCARY”! Shouted oceane” they come alive!” But it was too late I touched them and It was tragic they were really scary and annoying they went crazy AND SANG A truly annoying song 1234 da da da daaa da da daaaa da daa da da daaa boom boom goes the bottles! Screams echoed throghout the ocean! We have to save them!” Really?” Said oceane” yes we do””noooooooo”said oceane get your superman cape on were going! so they smashed the bottles in to pieces this time it was not screams that echoed throughout the ocean! It was cheers!
ReplyDeleteDear Ewan,
DeleteYour story was pretty awesome. I think it was cool how the bottles sang. You used great description.
Bye,
Tryston
The Magic Bottle
ReplyDeleteMe and ocean once were scuba diving in south coral liner. Just then I noticed a big ship wreck and I saw five shinny items next to the ship I went to touched them but ocean said ”don’t! “ but it was too late I had already touched them. When I let go the ship started to dance it was so funny but ocean got mad with me so I had to was my hands and the ship stopped then I got mad so ocean touched the bottle and the ship danced again this time it had a dolphin dancing round it I laughed my head of at it so did ocean. After that we carried on diving just then my tank got to one breath so I had to Sufis then my scuba diving trainer asked “do you want a coffee?” then me and ocean said “yes please I would love one” then he made us a cup of coffee each it was delicious was so nice I loved it. It was so nice I could have them nonstop all day. The next day we saw the bottles again this time we dived strait past them we had a good dive after that we saw some sharks it was so excited but then we had to go back to the boat and had another coffee.
100 word challenge
ReplyDeleteOne nonel day will and oceane were gouing Scooby diving. We wanted to go to shark infested wartes. Whith man eteing fish but in order to get there we had to pass the deth shtrip of the ocean but no man or woman has ever passed. We desided to tek the risk to get there becoues ith they did they oud be the ferst ever peopleto croues and then they wod be rich.
They managed to I would tell you about it but it was to grussem to no so getting to the story so from there they tock it esey so they got redey to go diving they did all the sathtingcheces all the divengsfuth sou they wasted no time to get diving but as Ocean gets into the water but awet of no were a grat white shark lounch out of the water I yeld ill come for you ocean wether it tacis my lith ill come four you.
So I cwickly grabed my meshty and then I lounched my selth into the water and scald for the hidies cricher .
Sudenly I come ackross a ship rek so I had a look around and I thound a poshan which seaid on it it can revif other people.
So the serech for ocean contin youed. Sudenly I sour the sharek so I creped up on it so I grabbed it
Dear William,
DeleteI liked how you were taking a big risk that none one has ever done. How big was the shark because you said you caught it? What did you catch it in was it hard to catch it? What did you do with it after you caught it?
Bye,
Drew
Shack attack
ReplyDeleteOcean was a very nice boy and he dived he felt wired and soddenly out of knower lots of shacks came and all of them had glass bottles in there mouths and al of came closer and he reached in his pocket and grabbed a zapper and zapped all of them saved his life and he became the richest man in the wold but the shacks mite come back for him but he said I will never kill nothing in his life over wise he will regret it and he will not be rich never again and he will be sad.
i think it was a fun story.But i a little bit confuse about some of your's sentences
DeleteHarry+ ocean
ReplyDeleteOne beautiful day ocean + harry where going soppy diving .
They were going in the carbon ashen.
As we dive in the water we sore a sinning orchid in the water so ocean went to it and I folded her down to it and it was a presses bottle.
Soundly a current came close to ocean.
And I cagily grabed ocean and dodged the current.
Ocean grabed the bottle and on are way back up she dropt the bottle so I swam back done but my tank was naly out of oxichon so I hate to act ceicly I manichd to grap it and haeded back ,.
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Wow what a lot of great questions and wow about those bottles.
ReplyDeleteNatasha
Moorside Primary School
why we can not touch the bottles?
ReplyDeleteWow it very cool the bottle is like an history bottle.
ReplyDeleteDo you know what the ship called when it sunk to the bottem of the sea?
ReplyDeleteDo you know what the ship was called?
ReplyDeleteDo you know what the ship was called if it sunk?
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