When i went on holiday i decided to go to a cave to explore. Once i got to the cave i looked around and but.... BANG i turned around as fast as lightning. I was being watched! I anxiously sniffled up the air i was petrefied. I scattered out of the cave but i didn't feel any more braver. Before i went i just kept looking like a scavenger was behind me. I was absaloultly petrafied. I was that scared i ran all the way home not forgetting to get on the plane.
My heart pounded furiously as I reached the other rocks I knew I was safe for a few seconds and then I realised I was not alone. Then the smell marched out of its cage but the view was magnificent. You could see the ocean from a third of a mile and then it slowly dropped like it was falling off the earth. Although the water was salty I still wouldn't mind a drink .As the water brushed across my feet I couldn't help detecting a ghostly smell. It sent shivers down my neck .Then I was sighted by a golden shivering rock to end my day.
As I hung from the mountain, I heard a screechy noise. Although the fierce waves bashed onto the rocky mountains, they didn't get a drop on me, ok maybe one or two, nevertheless it was still fun. Although the blood was rushing vastly down my veins, it didn't make me loose my excellent grip. Before I could even think about letting go of the mountain, I had to take a picture of the eye catching view. As I took the picture I saw a titanic Great White Shark jumping for dinner. So I through a piece of chicken towards the fierce Great White Shark.
I was on my boat and I saw a humongous cave. It was so big it could hold a thousand crocodiles and two snakes inside. When I saw it I was having my tea. While I went through it it felt like things would just jump out at me and it was so cold. It felt like the cold wrapped around me and tried to strangle me in the misty breeze.
I turned to see a shark a shark of which you see on films. It was as big as an ice berg it was heading right towards me at the speed of a cheetah hitting other poor fish that were in it's way. this giant preditor was just about to snap me up like a twig. it was now three metres away before “whaooooooooo watch out for that tree” said a man the size of an elephant to himself. Can it be … it is it's the one and only tarzan. But were was the shark was it gone...
When I was asleep I had a dream not a normal dream I dreamed I was in a deep blue water with a rocky wall surounding me. I suddenly woke up my heart was pounding furiously. I strolled allong the cooridoor and out of the door. Suddenly my dream came to live I steped out of the door not notesing the deep blue water in I got pulld under but I swam back up safely. Then I got back back up I fellt that some one was watching me. Suddenly I heared a wisper coming from under the water I shouted whos there there was no reply.
As I swam faster than ever to get away from the dangerous things that are following the small waves I made happily danced carefully around me. The natural waves danced quickly and eagerly around me and stopping me from moving. What would happen to me?
While im trying to get away from the danger thats following me I could tell there was something or someone watching me.
When I saw someone on a old wrecked boat I start shouting “HELLO HELP ME HELP HELP!” They didn't hear me then all of a sudden all the rocks started to move. Then a big stone fell on me like a apple falling from a high tree.
If you are been watched you would feel it with that you would think the the garment had to much money and made a brig in the middle of no where come on miss you can do better! My heart pounded furiously if you was on top of it!
As I was glaring at the enormous rippling waves! There was also a fantastic reflection in the centre of the ocean. As time went by I noticed the huge rock made an l shape if you rotated it. If you zoom in at the far back you will realize that it looks like a crazy man trying to dive belly first into the waves. Will he survive or will he not? Until a blood curdling Great white arise above the water and led the poor man to death... Can this day get any worse, my best friend is gone...
As I was walking I saw the most bizzar looking beach with huge rocks. My heart pounded furiously.I glanced at the beach for ages until I was tired.As soon possible I was bound to go on the beach so I went to the beach and I had the time of my life until I was face to face with a great white shark who was so hungery he could eat a gazzilion crocodiles. I was running like mad but the great white shark got my leg for hours and hours until something went crunch.My bone was broken and the great whit shark ate both of my big, fat,chunky legs and I screamed as loud as I could but no one could hear me,what have I done.
When I lucked at the glistening wathy water it locked it was hot and made me want to jump in to it. As I walked acros the slippery rocks I felt like I was gunae falle of in to the came water sea. The sea lucked licke sumwun had spred glitter acros it. It lucked warm at first But when I put my fut in it naley frose of. The cold rapd around my fut.
During my swim it was light .Then I ended up in a cave then it got darker. It was so beautiful so I took a photo. Then I looked at it and it was more shiny and light. As I glanced at the the fai end of the ocean I was sure that I could see a shark. As I zoomed in I could see a shark. Then my heart pounded furiously. Then I climbed the rocks as fast as a cheetah. Then I was on the top of the rocks. Then I was so happy that I was not died.
As the water crashed against the chalk white rocks the sun made the sky look like a chrome car that was shining like a diamond. I peered out of the cave entrance. I saw the frame of a boat, the boat was heading straight for the cave entrane. 12 days I was stuck inside this bad scented cave, longing for food. The boat was coming closer and closer and suddenly BAM !! The boat had crashed into the cave entrance. I was TRAPPED!
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When i went on holiday i decided to go to a cave to explore.
ReplyDeleteOnce i got to the cave i looked around and but....
BANG i turned around as fast as lightning.
I was being watched!
I anxiously sniffled up the air i was petrefied.
I scattered out of the cave but i didn't feel any more braver.
Before i went i just kept looking like a scavenger was behind me.
I was absaloultly petrafied.
I was that scared i ran all the way home not forgetting to get on the plane.
My heart pounded furiously as I reached the other rocks I knew I was safe for a few seconds and then I realised I was not alone. Then the smell marched out of its cage but the view was magnificent.
ReplyDeleteYou could see the ocean from a third of a mile and then it slowly dropped like it was falling off the earth. Although the water was salty I still wouldn't mind a drink .As the water brushed across my feet I couldn't help detecting a ghostly smell. It sent shivers down my neck .Then I was sighted by a golden shivering rock to end my day.
As I hung from the mountain, I heard a screechy noise. Although the fierce waves bashed onto the rocky mountains, they didn't get a drop on me, ok maybe one or two, nevertheless it was still fun. Although the blood was rushing vastly down my veins, it didn't make me loose my excellent grip. Before I could even think about letting go of the mountain, I had to take a picture of the eye catching view. As I took the picture I saw a titanic Great White Shark jumping for dinner. So I through a piece of chicken towards the fierce Great White Shark.
ReplyDeleteI was on my boat and I saw a humongous cave. It was so big it could hold a thousand crocodiles and two snakes inside. When I saw it I was having my tea. While I went through it it felt like things would just jump out at me and it was so cold. It felt like the cold wrapped around me and tried to strangle me in the misty breeze.
ReplyDeleteI turned to see a shark a shark of which you see on films. It was as big as an ice berg it was heading right towards me at the speed of a cheetah hitting other poor fish that were in it's way. this giant preditor was just about to snap me up like a twig. it was now three metres away before “whaooooooooo watch out for that tree” said a man the size of an elephant to himself. Can it be …
ReplyDeleteit is it's the one and only tarzan. But were was the shark was it gone...
When I was asleep I had a dream not a normal dream I dreamed I was in a deep blue water with a rocky wall surounding me. I suddenly woke up my heart was pounding furiously. I strolled allong the cooridoor and out of the door. Suddenly my dream came to live I steped out of the door not notesing the deep blue water in I got pulld under but I swam back up safely. Then I got back back up I fellt that some one was watching me. Suddenly I heared a wisper coming from under the water I shouted whos there there was no reply.
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ReplyDeleteAs I swam faster than ever to get away from the dangerous things that are following the small waves I made happily danced carefully around me. The natural waves danced quickly and eagerly around me and stopping me from moving. What would happen to me?
While im trying to get away from the danger thats following me I could tell there was something or someone watching me.
When I saw someone on a old wrecked boat I start shouting “HELLO HELP ME HELP HELP!” They didn't hear me then all of a sudden all the rocks started to move. Then a big stone fell on me like a apple falling from a high tree.
If you are been watched you would feel it with that you would think the the garment had to much
ReplyDeletemoney and made a brig in the middle of no where come on miss you can do better! My heart pounded furiously if you was on top of it!
As I was glaring at the enormous rippling waves! There was also a fantastic reflection in the centre of the ocean. As time went by I noticed the huge rock made an l shape if you rotated it. If you zoom in at the far back you will realize that it looks like a crazy man trying to dive belly first into the waves. Will he survive or will he not? Until a blood curdling Great white arise above the water and led the poor man to death...
ReplyDeleteCan this day get any worse, my best friend is gone...
100 word challenge.
ReplyDeleteAs I was walking I saw the most bizzar looking beach with huge rocks. My heart pounded furiously.I glanced at the beach for ages until I was tired.As soon possible I was bound to go on the
beach so I went to the beach and I had the time of my life until I was face to face with a great white
shark who was so hungery he could eat a gazzilion crocodiles. I was running like mad but the great
white shark got my leg for hours and hours until something went crunch.My bone was broken and the great whit shark ate both of my big, fat,chunky legs and I screamed as loud as I could but no one
could hear me,what have I done.
When I lucked at the glistening wathy water it locked it was hot and made me want to jump in to it.
ReplyDeleteAs I walked acros the slippery rocks I felt like I was gunae falle of in to the came water sea.
The sea lucked licke sumwun had spred glitter acros it. It lucked warm at first But when I put my fut in it naley frose of. The cold rapd around my fut.
During my swim it was light .Then I ended up in a cave then it got darker. It was so beautiful so I took a photo. Then I looked at it and it was more shiny and light. As I glanced at the the fai end of the ocean I was sure that I could see a shark. As I zoomed in I could see a shark. Then my heart pounded furiously. Then I climbed the rocks as fast as a cheetah. Then I was on the top of the rocks. Then I was so happy that I was not died.
ReplyDeleteAs the water crashed against the chalk white rocks the sun made the sky look like a chrome car that was shining like a diamond. I peered out of the cave entrance. I saw the frame of a boat, the boat was heading straight for the cave entrane. 12 days I was stuck inside this bad scented cave, longing for food. The boat was coming closer and closer and suddenly BAM !! The boat had crashed into the cave entrance. I was TRAPPED!
ReplyDeleteSome tremendous pieces of writing and phrases that you've used Y5. Well done! Now take time enjoying other people's work and pick out key words you like - perhaps like this:
ReplyDeleteV -
C -
O -
P -
After you've done that, write down juicy vocabulary that you are going to try using in your writing. Use a dictionary to find out what any mean that you're unsure of.
Publish that comment, then pick out someone's post that really stands out to you. Say why you like it!